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.... How's that for a your momma joke?

It's good, but it's not great.

Seeing as I'm stuck at 0.04 MBS I might as well give you a report on how the contest is going.

01 - Listeri69 - A New Beginning.
02 - Splendour - Valour's Station
03 - DocStone - Three years a Rogue
04 - KalRyper - Let sleeping rogues lie
05 - azdour - A Rogue Story
06 - Erik Marcaigh - Sticky Situation
07 - Darren Grey - The Adventuring Party
08 - CdrTwisted - Bienvenue a Gram
09 - Frank - The Little Missile That Could
10 - Simoof - The Rogue Vote
11 - insanephoton - Rogues Gallery
12 - MrMogadon - Toby the Trapper
13 - T.j - Rupert the Rogue's righteous response
14 - Galactic Midden - Concord with the Shadows

6 spaces still to fill. If you are like me and you won't be playing Elite anytime soon, why not write a Drabble instead. It's fun and it might win you the adoration of the bunch of rogues on this thread.

The details can be found way way up at the top of this very long thread, and the topic this week is "ROGUES"

Good luck if you choose to join us.
 

The Little Missile That Could
It was a dumb missile. Dumber because its brain was frazzled by an explosion behind it, as its owner's ship chrysanthemummed into a million bright pieces.

Black-Hearted Greebe deftly jinked clear of the missile.

The missile wasn't told to abort by its dead owner. It had forgotten to self-destruct after thirty minutes. It just continued straight ahead.

- - - - -

Parenthood had reformed Greebe. He'd used the money from his dubious past to build a mining business for his children. He wasn't even aware of the ancient missile heading for him. One minute he was out fixing his cargo scoop, the next, gone.
Am I allowed to like that? It's by Frank. I think I need help.
 
Too late for last weeks Fashion drabbles it seems that during Beta 1.2 I was working for the Fashion Police. Here's the picture to prove it :D
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Reluctant Rogue

Jeffrey didn't like to dwell on the reasons for him being an outlaw. Suffice to say, the real culprit was someone else. The illegal actions he had to resort to to get the necessities of life, however, had long since stopped being a burden on his conscience.

The death of the crew in that trading vessel was unfortunate, but he needed their transponder to dock.

"Release my family!"

Jeffrey was examining a vial.

"Sorry doc, no can do. Rest assured that they will be released, at a safe place, once I'm sure you did a good job on my family."

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Two to's in a row, is that ok?

And I'm not quite sure if outcast and fugitive can be used interchangeably. What I mean is fugitive, but outcast sounds better.
 
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Jeffrey didn't like to dwell on the reasons for him being an outcast. Suffice to say that the real culprit was someone else. The illegal actions he had to resort to to get necessities of life, however, had long since stopped being a burden on his conscience.

The death of the crew in that trading vessel was unfortunate, but he needed their transponder to dock.

"Release my family!"

Jeffrey was examining a vial.

"Sorry doc, no can do. Rest assured that they will be released, at a safe place, once I'm sure you did a good job on my family."

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Two to's in a row, is that ok?

And I'm not quite sure if outcast and fugitive can be used interchangeably. What I mean is fugitive, but outcast sounds better.

Ignoring the obvious, there isn't a problem with two to's. You could also have had two had's (word count permitting) ".. The illegal actions he had, had to resort to...", but that is merely an aside.

I'm not very good at proper English myself, so maybe some of our more esteemed members (quiet Simon - both of you) can comment.

Although outcast doesn't necessarily have the same sense of wrong doing as fugitive, I think it's fine here.

Ok, here's the obvious
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Two to's in a row, is that ok?

And I'm not quite sure if outcast and fugitive can be used interchangeably. What I mean is fugitive, but outcast sounds better.

That's fine, in fact you could even have that line written as:

The illegal actions he had had to resort to to get the necessities of life, however...

You would get away with that if the illegal actions were in the past, and he was reflecting on them. The English Language is completely broken, and just doesn't make sense when looked at closely.

As for the second part, fugitive to me is someone who is hunted, on the run, a person who does not want to be captured - for example, Harrison Ford in The Fugitive. As for outcast, to me it is someone who has been shunned by his peers/community and is no longer welcome, they have been "cast out" of the group - the Ugly Duckling as an example.

You could argue though that a fugitive by it's very definition is also an outcast, by being a fugitive from the law they are outcast from society.

Language, who'd a thunk it?
 
As for the second part, fugitive to me is someone who is hunted, on the run, a person who does not want to be captured - for example, Harrison Ford in The Fugitive. As for outcast, to me it is someone who has been shunned by his peers/community and is no longer welcome, they have been "cast out" of the group - the Ugly Duckling as an example.

You could argue though that a fugitive by it's very definition is also an outcast, by being a fugitive from the law they are outcast from society.

That's exactly what was bothering me. I did a little research and found this from the bible about outcasts:

"And he will be a wild man; his hand will be against every man, and every man's hand against him"

It seemed to fit in pretty good, but there was always that nagging thought that the person had been cast out of society rather than leaving on his own accord and being sought after.

I think I'll change it to outlaw instead.
 
All in good taste

"Mummy, are rogues bad?"

"Why do you ask, dear?"

Madeleine looked at her daughter as she put dinner on the table.

"Mrs. Snyder told Simon off for dressing up with guns and eye-patch for Kindergarten. She said that even pretending to be a rogue was in bad taste".

"Well, I'm sure she has her reasons. I consider it a profession like many others. In the end it's just about mouths that need feeding."

She sat down with a smile, glancing at the food container on the kitchen counter, it's federation logo and "crew meal" stamped on the side slightly scorched.
 
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Welcome Home

Prime fracking ring-pieces, the lot of them.

The starfield spins slowly, slightly blurred by the greasy remlok visor. Yes I should bloody clean the damn thing from time to time, but after two months exploring on the fringe it's not the first in the maintenance priority list.

Two fracking months wasted, two god dammed fracking months!

The torn and burned remains of my beloved Asp rotate into view.

Fracking dolts!

Call themselves pirates? They didn't even scan me, I was carrying no cargo at all.

No demands, nothing.

Fracking god dammed psychopaths!

I feel nothing but futility, despair, and hate.
 
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