A small change:
"Ok, Commander, you are a go for Pad 'One' 'Two'"
To:
"Ok, Commander, you a a go for Pad 'One' 'Two', Approach on Vector 'Two' 'Four' 'Zero'"
The second being the compass heading that, if you line your compass to heading 240, (example), that you will be lined up very close to...
As far as I understand it's all there, some of the dots are just not connected.
When you use the DC you get assigned to holding patterns, however if you dock on manual you can do whatever as long as you got the permission.
My suggestion:
Departure, this is also controlled by the ATC, you...