Cmdr Norre's venture to Saga and back again

/* I'm not that experienced to roleplaying but when starting this journey I wrote log messages and sent to my friends playing the game. I since decided to try to make it more serious and put a little backstory in it and I hope you'll enjoy it. First post is a backlog since 3rd of April. I've used some slang from the lexicon presented in this forum */


Background
Since I was a young boy I’ve always admired the deep space explorers. I used to listen in on my father and his wingmen when they reminisced about their missions into uncharted territory.
As years past by and I myself became a pilot I never came around to plan or execute any venture into the uncharted space. When I was given my first Sidewinder I was young and rebellious. I usually was deep lurking and engaged myself in hot stuff. One day my mother came visiting my hangar unannounced. The ship was a mess and the hanger filled with stolen goods. Long story short – I had two choices. Get my life in order and earn my money in a respectable way or continue on the path of destruction with no bonds left to my family.

I sold of what I had and bought a Cobra. I started hauling goods and after a while I was specialized in rare item trading and making a hefty profit. With cash in the bank I didn’t have much to worry about and expanded my fleet with a Lakon Type-7 to use for my trading missions and refitted my Cobra into a combat vessel.

To make my parents proud I started doing work for the Empire and quickly raised in rank. Today I’m a Baron and faithfully serves the Empire when I can. While every aspect of my life started to get in order my longing for exploration returned and I’ve decided to take the step. My plans are to make a pilgrimage to the galactic core. I’ve read logs about ventures to Saga (aka Sagittarius A) and decided to take myself there.


APR03
She is a beaut! My new vessel. After doing some research I decided to go with the ASP Explorer. I’ve named her Resolution after the ancient earth explorer James Cook’s vessel. My father came to the station to help me prepare and choose fittings.
We didn’t get all the equipment we wished for but I found it sufficient and with the current loadout I will be able to jump 28ly.
I will set out tomorrow and I’m expecting to pull a shift long enough to take me out to the Twilight Zone.

cmdr norre - out


APR05
I've been on my way for two days and everything is running honky-dory. My scanners haven’t picked up another ship in about 50 jumps now so I’ve reached the Big Sky Country.
Spirit is high but every time I'm calculating the next leg of the voyage I get reminded of how big the galaxy is and how small and insignificant we are.
I've diverted from my course a few degrees with the purpose of investigating the Lagoon Nebula.
I'm thrusting forward.

cmdr norre - out


APR06
This morning I arrived at Lagoon Nebula. I've been jumping around making detailed surface scans of some supergiants in the vicinity, finding several of them already charted by other explorers.
I've since aligned my route back on track and once again aiming for Saga.

cmdr norre - out


APR07
During the day I’ve had a long session of pure jump-and-ping flying. I covered about half of the distance and once again I derailed for the excitement of a nebula. During the afternoon I arrived at the IOWHAIL nebula where I spent a few hours investigating but after that I went back on route taking another long jump session.
During my venture I never had to think too much about gas stations. I make 36 jumps in roughly 30 minutes and scooping up during next alignment and cooldown of my FSD. However, a few times when not paying enough attention I’ve overheated my systems when hitting the FSD to close to the stars.

cmdr norre - out


APR08
Day 5 in my venture to Saga. I've got 2736.5 light years left and I've encountered four black holes during the day. One of which I miscalculated its mass and sustained further damage on my ship systems. Most of my modules are damaged but within acceptable limits and I've got half of my field-maintenance capability left.
However. The star density has significantly increased and my navigational computer is struggling to cope. I can no longer calculate a route of a thousand light years at a time. The vast amount of stars makes my head spinning when trying to plot the course for my last leg of the voyage.
During my coffee breaks when I stare out in the cold dead space I can't help to think about all the logs I've read from pilots which gazed into the abyss. I think about my wingmen back home in Achenar and surrounding systems. Are my dreams to big? Will I die out here? How are my friends getting by?

cmdr norre - out


APR09.
After pulling a night shifter at the helm I've finally reached the center. Currently I'm orbiting the supermassive Black Hole of Sagittarius A.
The last leg of the voyage proved to be the most challenging yet. With only two thousand light years to go the navigational computer ceased to assist me with any useful calculations and I was forced to recalculate every 200 light years or so.
Tired and exhausted I messed up while scooping fuel from a Star thus overheating my systems once more. I believe I've started to reach the limit of what my faithful ship will put up with.
I still got 90% Hull integrity but the numbers are going down on several of the primary modules. The Power Distributor has so far failed me twice and slung me out of super cruise resulting in even further damage. The sensors are glitching and has several times left me blind when dropping into new star systems. I'm putting my faith in Lakon Spaceways and hoping they did not cut to much of the military grade of the initial ASP Mk II.
It certainly is a heavy thought to ponder how space is ready to shred my ship to pieces and slung my body into a forever going passage. For my body never to return the earth it was once was ascended from.
I must admit that I miss the sight of life. I would even welcome a federation scumbag flying by as long as hardpoints remain undeployed. For I've got no armament what so ever. I will remain in the vicinity of the center and investigate some close-by stars while I'm prospecting the idea of an even tougher journey back home.
I’ve been prospecting the charts and the inner part of the galaxy is a true klondike for black hole hunters and it’s my complete conviction I must tag a few before returning home.

cmdr norre – out


APR11
I’ve spent yesterday just floating about and taking a days’ rest from jumping. I kicked back in my bunk with some Lavian brandy and a few good movies. I also indulged myself in a nice meal as a change up for the usual food cartridges.
As of this morning I set out to tag black holes. It started well and I basically taged a hole every other jump. After a while it started feeling like a grind and after pulling an Icarus I could almost feel the noise in my bones as the canopy sustained its first cracks.
I’ve started jumping topside of the galactic plane to find less dens space and has now turned about. I’m now locked on for the longest mile. I will try to suppress any urge to divert from my solward due to the state of the ship and my repeated mistakes of not paying too much attention.

Cmdr norre - out
 
Greetings Commander Norre.

This a great first attempt, since there is no 'general' format for writing CMDR logs to be found on this forum, people generally write them in the format you have chosen and this is perfectly fine. Sadly however, if you search this forum for other, similar CMDR logs you'll find them almost devoid of any attention from the Elite Role Playing community. It's almost like their writings & creativity is sucked into a blackhole the moment they post their logs...

May I offer you some general advice for your CMDR logs?

Perhaps start your CMDR log with a detailed Bio of your RP character, be as detailed as you like, there is no penalty what-so-ever for a being creative and imaginative as you like here. Is this character male or female, what is their normal profession, where did this character grow up, what influences did this character experience in their early years that has shaped their character today? Is this character forceful, strong minded, resolute or laid-back and avoids conflict with others. These characteristics shapes their decisions making in so many ways right across the board. This will also allow you the opportunity to get to know your character so much better and in turn, make it more believable to your readers. With this Bio the reader will get a better sense and feel for what you write afterwards, i.e your CMDR logs.

With the above taken care of, now you can include flashbacks or related experiences from your character's past that you can interspersed between your normal daily logs, this will serve to not only break-up a wall of text that for the most part, appears similar from day to day, but will make reading more exciting and further allow YOU to strengthen and reinforce your character even further.

Lastly, and this one will require some careful thought and preparation on your part.. If your CMDR Logs / Character writings is meant for reading and entertaining your readers (why else would people spend time writing to a public forum) then creating a theme and style of presentation for your character in your posts will help people to instantly recognize your character when they open your posts as opposed to the 'standard' wall of text we see quite often here. *If* there is a genuine interest from the RP community, I will write up a guide explaining all this in much more detail, its a real eye opener!

Finally, welcome to the RP community of Elite Dangerous, I look forward to reading more of your adventures and wish you safe traveling in the far and distant stars.
 
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I enjoyed this read. Much like your character, my pilot also began his career smuggling and moving rares, but has since responded to the allure of navigating deep space. I attempted to portray the moment of his transition from smuggler to explorer on this forum (titled "Three Minutes"), but it does not appear to be receiving much reader traffic. That's ok... Admittedly, it was my first attempt at creative writing since high school. And seeing as how I graduated in 1991, it's safe to say, I am out of practice. But reading entries like yours inspires and motivates me to not only continue on the path of a Bowman, but also continue documenting and sharing my adventures.
Nice work, Commander. Thank you for sharing and keep them coming!
 
/* Commander Malandark. Thank you for your feedback. I see what your saying and I will consider this for future writing. Maybe I'll update this and rewrite it a bit but I guess I will start fresh the next time keeping more notes during my gameplay. I will work towards a more entertaining style in writing as well as a more substantial backstory and bio.
I for one would happily endorse a guide for this.

Abra Cadaver - Thanks for your compliment I'm happy you enjoyed the reading. I since read your 'three minutes' and I liked the concept very much, I could visualize the scene!. As youself mentioned, its hard getting in to creative writing when your not used to it. Same goes for me. Just as you my experience from this type of writing is limited to high school even though my gratuation happned 14 years later than yours. Since then I've only been writing university thesis and technical reports.

With writing techniques aside I must say I'm getting more out of ED when trying this. I've not before played too much of these 'open-world-or-whatever-it-is' kind of games where you have to make your own story and I'm still struggeling with the concept. Putting down a story in regards to the experiences seems to work quite well though.

Anyway, here comes an update from the two latest days. Hope you Enjoy */


APR 12
I planted my first flag today (Aunair II-R D5-104). I found many interesting things this far north but the lack of stars makes the home stretch long and twitchi. On top of my first earth like planet I found my first Carbon star.

My luck also rubs off on my fuel habits. Today I was sloppy and quite close on running dry in the wastelands but found a very close by scoopable star which I arrived at running on fumes. I’ve since decided to descend on the galactic plane to a safer route. It’s a shame since I’ve found many interesting things on my current route. But I’m homesick and in the current state it feels like I’m playing with fire being in this transparent area.

APR13
Frack frack frack! I should’ve known better. I’m on what feels like a never ending jump ‘n ping routine and during the day I’ve overworked my multitasking skills. During my jumps I’ve been fiddling with other stuff and when I engaged a hyper jump the ship was not aligned. I hit the button again thinking I was a nanosec to early for the cooldown. This resulted in an emergency drop-out of super cruise.

I literary took a dump in my pants as the ship slunged out and my canopy’s cracks made an exponential growth. The view now resembles the spider webs back home when gazing upon them in the moonlight. I should've learned working after safe routines a long time ago. During my younger days I lost three of my fingers in a lathe machine when forgetting to remove the crank from the spindle. When getting back from the hostpital with my new artifical limbs my father had installed a safety, making the machine in-operatable when the crank wasn't put in a stand. He has always been notorious with these kind of things and he has always been bugging me about not wireing a general purpose button for the FSD drive. For every time he mentioned it I've been waveing it off. When preparing Resolution for this voyage we had this very same conversation ending in he telling me that its hard to learn an old dog new tricks. I'm not sure what a dog is but I'm ready to learn now - That is. If I'll ever see him again.

Shaken by the incident and with the sight of civilized space on the horizon (~2000ly to closest station), I acted in rage and frustration and pushed forward. Aligning the trajectory and hitting the frameshift. I jumped a system but when going for the next in route the frameshift failed me and went offline. This occurred several times during my calculated leg. After doing a proper assasment of the damage I decided to put the last of my maintenance field on the FSD module boosting it up to 60%. I’ve since been able to jump without hickups.

With a very short way left I’ve decided to drop out of super cruise to get some rest. I’m making too big mistakes in my current condition to justify pushing rest of the stretch in this cycle.
 
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