ED Exploration Haiku contest...er party

[Brian of Earth]

Some might say my poem is simplistic, repetitive and dull. Others might describe it as solid.

This....is...amazing...

 

[Flavourless]

Fair enough, but there is much more to a haiku than just 5/7/5
Most (maybe all) of these offerings are missing crucial key elements like the juxtaposition of two ideas (one human and one metaphysical), the cut between them (a kireji), and a traditional seasonal reference (a kigo).

Interesting poetry, but haiku? not really.

 

[Cody]

They call it modern, or western, haiku - a sign of the times!

 

[Rozete]

switch on the pd and play
pips to eng to wep to sys
bubble is missed

 

[Alex Traut]

Fair enough, but there is much more to a haiku than just 5/7/5
Most (maybe all) of these offerings are missing crucial key elements like the juxtaposition of two ideas (one human and one metaphysical), the cut between them (a kireji), and a traditional seasonal reference (a kigo).

Interesting poetry, but haiku? not really.

[video=youtube;C6cxNR9ML8k]https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=C6cxNR9ML8k[/video]

English-language Haiku is not a strictly-defined genre. Yes, those are elements commonly associated with the genre, but they are not all required, and there are a number of subcategories.

The vast galaxy
containing infinite threads
this one is for fun

 

[streki]

space madness or glory
it sounded so romantic
hope i make it home

 

[Robert Maynard]

Once upon a time
There was a brave explorer
He discovered loads.

 

[streki]

went neutron farming
so now I have a python
A-rated, boyeee

 

[nexxo]

Fair enough, but there is much more to a haiku than just 5/7/5
Most (maybe all) of these offerings are missing crucial key elements like the juxtaposition of two ideas (one human and one metaphysical), the cut between them (a kireji), and a traditional seasonal reference (a kigo).

Interesting poetry, but haiku? not really.

Shhhh. Just let it happen...



Undocked, I float
from the station's steel womb
and am born again.

 

[Argos]

10-K LY Out.
Ummm, did I turn off the stove?
Too late for that now!

 

[Redleg]

Jump to new system.
Dog whimpers, must pee.
Set thrust to zero.

 

[CaptainKremmen]

Fair enough, but there is much more to a haiku than just 5/7/5
Most (maybe all) of these offerings are missing crucial key elements like the juxtaposition of two ideas (one human and one metaphysical), the cut between them (a kireji), and a traditional seasonal reference (a kigo).

Interesting poetry, but haiku? not really.

Mine totally had all those things.

 

[Redleg]

The black hole warps me.
Body exclusion zone reached,
a moment of awe.


I afk'd exploring.
From the other room: heat damage.
Panic! Heading home now.


Passing a black hole
stars scatter like grains of rice
thrown by a madman.

Sounds like a reply of the recent Obsidian Ant video.

 

[Surly_Badger]

Interesting poetry, but haiku? not really.

Shōsan The Sage once said, "When a man on a webforum tries to define the zen, it slips between his fingers and destroys his keyboard."