Mir Fnar, not-so-much-a-Commander than Something Else

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... stars my home ...
... a wonder around every corner ...
... shall see what it is ...
... shall see what it has been ...
... shall see what it will become ...
... strange creatures in their shiny sky barges ...
... a meteor? No, a small barge, falling ...
... calling ...
... must see ...


Music: GodMode
 
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Interesting poem too - is that her back story? (with a ship falling from space and her investigating it) Or is that more metaphorical? The way she's described leads me to believe she's not human (or forgot her humanity). Then again, I could be reading into it to much.
 
Interesting poem too - is that her back story? (with a ship falling from space and her investigating it) Or is that more metaphorical? The way she's described leads me to believe she's not human (or forgot her humanity). Then again, I could be reading into it to much.

Not reading at all too much into it, you got it all correct :D - and what comes to being human, no, she's not one (as per the artwork).
 
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[...cont...]

She stood there staring up, the onyx black ground under her heels softly glimmering and reflecting the now shining lightshow. Head canting to side her eyes followed the fiery trail that was being drawn above.

... sparkles! High, high they fly, fade ...

She sprang to light jog, chasing the sky trail, but soon came to dead stop - a ball of flame ahead expanding when whatever that fell hit the crystalline ground. A few times it bounced back, tumbling a while in the air, and then plummeted down again like a flat rock that was thrown to leap across a pond's surface.

... oh, oh, hahhh! ...

For a moment she giggled at the wondrous sight before her feet again carried her across the land. And eventually what had fallen came into her sight, the flames around it rather quickly dying and just a pillar of smoke soon marking the spot of final touchdown. A mass of bent and burned metal lay in front of her eyes.

Mir quirked a brow, her gaze examining the groaning, hissing and moaning pile of metal, the landscape faintly ringing in echo of the landing. After a while she stepped next to it, touching the quickly cooling surface and smirking to her own reflection. She leaned down, tips of her hair flowing to touch the ground as she noticed something blinking, a transparent surface behind which was a "room" with floating lights and a chair.

... pretty, strange, but pretty ...
... what might you be? ...


She spoke, making a note of something that lay in shambles under one of the floating lights. The pilot of the ship, or whatever was left of him or her, didn't reply. Mir frowned, perplexed, then straightened herself to walk around the ship, her fingertips trailing its surface.

She couldn't make heads or tails of what exactly was at her hands reach. The only thing she knew of it that it could fly, and that many of its kind had done so before above in the skies.
 
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Soon Mir came across a crack in the metallic mass, through which a pitched hiss emitted along rays of dim light. Her fingers fit into the crack and she took a step back, pulling. Slowly the crack widened, then suddenly she found herself tumbling over and landing on her butt, a blast of air billowing her hair. A bent doorway of sorts had opened, leading into the mass of metal.

She stood up, sending a curious peek inside. Wiring and bent metal sheets hanging from the walls, and hissing pipes and a weird smell greeted her. Briefly wrinkling her nose to the smell assaulting her nostrils she headed in.

The layout within seemed at first complex. But in essence it was rather simple after all; a vast storage of some sort, various small rooms and then the room into which she saw from outside.

Mir chuckled at the pretty sight of the floating lights, "panels" of some kind upon which the light formed pictures, and graphs, and something what she thought to be text and numbers. The pictures piqued her interest much more than the crawling wall of text (which she didn't understand to begin with).

She touched one of the ethereal images, one which resembled the mass of metal within which she was. It spun briefly around. Chuckling amused she sat down on the seat around which the lights were concentrated, wondering grabbing her fingers around a handle of sorts. To her surprise, the whole structure shook when she lightly tilted the handle. She tilted it the other way and her surprise grew even more... the view of the landscape outside leveled, the metallic hulk lifted itself from the dark crystalline ground.

Mir glanced at corner of the room, the crumpled pile, the owner of the strange barge, didn't seem to be bothered by her curiosity.

... I see, rest as you will ...
... What this be, you do tell me? ...
... I see, you do not speak ...
... Like I do, I wonder ...


She fell silent, canted her head, then shrugged when no reply was given in any shape or form.

Time passed while she toyed around with the lights and the, now obvious, controls of the barge. Moment by moment she learned more. She closed her eyes and pulled a handle upwards, and with a banging groan and creak the barge became airborne. She burst into elated lilting laughter and nudged the handle forth... and the barge obeyed, slowly gliding forward...
 
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I like this. It has, for me an almost ethereal quality, a child like period for someone whose mind is mixed and twisted with augmented systems. Or maybe I am getting the wrong thing out of it. Take away: I like it. Well written, interesting, and I''d like to see more of Mir's adventures and observations.
 
[...cont...]

Mir merrily humming guided the barge gently across the landscape at not-too-high altitude, seeing the familiar scenery now from above - a forest of crystals, the obsidian hills, and a murky lake of liquid as dark as the void between the stars. The lake, it wasn't dark now, however, for it reflected the light of the stars and the joyously flaring engines of the barge like a vast mirror.

A soft, metallic skittering sound broken Mir from her thoughts and she glanced back across her shoulder. A trio of small many-legged creatures of some sort climbed the walls, one clinging to the ceiling. With hissing noises they seemed to tend to the cracks at the walls, wiring and rewiring this and that while completely oblivious to her presence.

... what these might be? ...
... funny creatures, tender touches ...


She let go of the barge's controls and it came to stand still. Her attempt to touch one of the metallic seeming creatures was nimbly dodged by it, but other than avoiding her touch it didn't seem to pay attention to anything else than what it was tinkering with at the moment. She smirked and left them to their devices, just then to realize that the owner of the barge had left the room. She frowned.

... say no thing, leave you do ...
... speak not, but should have told ...


Mir decided to go look for the sneaky alien who never spoke a word to her. She peeked out of the room into the corridor that led to three directions. No one there, except a pair more of those metallic tender-touches fixing things.
 
After a long while of searching around Mir came to conclusion that the alien was nowhere to be found. Which was quite odd as she was sure she had looked everywhere within the barge and the tender-touches apparently had closed the outdoors leading doorway. Ponderous she sat on one of the many boxes that littered the storage room to watch the skittering tender-touches in their duties.

When after quite a while had passed the tender-touches ceased their work. The barge looked quite different, a whole lot less in shambles - broken bits fixed and even polished too. Mir stood up and stretched herself luxuriously before wandering off back to the barge's control room.

A stoic sounding female voice stated something upon Mir's arrival. For a moment she stopped on her track and tried to pinpoint the source of the voice. But aside herself, there was no one else.

... where be you? ...
... who be you? ...


No reply to her query was given. Frowning Mir sat on the chair, her fingers a flutter toying with the light panels. Then something occurred to her, the voice had been the barge itself. She grinned softly at such revelation.

... automaton, alien friend ...
... who would have thought ...
... no thought you have, I assume?
... say, say words again ...
... the chime naught told me ...
 
I accidentally clicked on your signature and it led me to this story. This is a great read, and I hope more people come across it.
 
[...cont...]

Mir set the barge in motion again to glide across the landscape, but then she glanced upwards at the stars above and without thinking about it she pulled at the controls. The barge lift its nose and the soft murmur of its engines rose in volume into low growl, the growl then turned into loud echoing roar that reverberated throughout the barge. Mir shivered excited although acceleration pushed her tight against the back of her seat. The initial rush of gaining speed didn't last long and the barge steadied itself soon.

The foremost light panel in front of Mir lit up with a number of different images, most of them in motion in one direction or the other. For a while the imagery made no sense to her, not until she made the barge turn toward a nearby seeming speck of light and the whole set of images shifted on the panel.

After a while the speck of light Mir had seen turned out to be a mountain sized white chunk of to her unknown matter. She approached the slowly spinning chunk, admiring its unusual beauty.

Then another speck caught her attention, a fast moving one at that and which was moving toward the object her barge was orbiting. Mir turned to see better what was incoming, briefly noting a change in the light panels around her. The approaching object was another barge and it stopped nearby, a bright beam of light soon emitting from it toward the floating chunk.

Mir observed both amused and perplexed what was going on. It seemed the other barge was cutting small pieces from the gigantic chunk, eventually collecting them up and then speeding away elsewhere.

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Is she an AI Avatar then?

Who knows, who knows ... Remains to be found out as much for herself than readers what she is :D
 
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Ooh it's an on-going story, awesome!

As far as I can figure, Mir is supposed to be incredibly clever and have catlike curiosity. Definitely not human (assuming this is the universe of Elite), but species indeterminate without more detailed information.

Based on the way Mir thinks, I would guess plant (vine, traditionally) or cat/wolf species basis.
 
Although, if the picture provided is Mir as of the start of the story, then she is a cyborg of some kind, since she is not AI.
 
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