Just saying, this is for a year 11 english assignment, non-profit and stuff like that.
Another thing is that the teacher said dont go over 950 words, so i had to leave A LOT out. even though im at over 1100 words lol. i modified some things to suit the story though, like the worth of credits, and the distance between stations in LHS 3447, i couldve wrote about it being a huge annoyance to do anything in there but... to keep word count down i didnt.
im posting this just to get you guys and girls opinions on if its good enough, im not too good at english as a subject itself, but story telling isnt too much of a problem.
Tell me anything you dont like, or think i should change, keeping in mind i am already past the max words. hehe ^_^
Start:
Waking up in asteroid belts of LHS 3477 isn’t too bad, the view is nice, i-it gets kinda cold when the sun goes behind the planet. But it’s safe, no one needs to go here, not even mining ships, the only company I have is the simple Ship AI, and the occasional slow moving asteroid hitting the side of my Cobra. Most people prefer starports, but that is not an option for me right now, it’s not the starport itself, but the bountyhunters who linger just outside, always scanning passing ships. If you manage to even get in the starport in the first place with a bounty, getting out and away is a completely different story, boosting straight from launch can be fatal, especially with a stripped down cobra like mine. With minimal amour, boost speed gets up to 450m/s, its either get it perfect the first time, or have to pay the insurance buyback plus any unpaid fines.
Its 13:43 Universal time, I should get going, only 1 hour left until my bounty runs out I shouldn’t have any problems, I mean, a 1,000,000cr bounty is quite a lot, but nothing to get excited about, just the weapons on my cobra cost more than that. Speaking of weapons im low on charges for both of my class 2 Railguns. Two class 1 gimbled beam lasers are good, but they are nothing without Railguns to back them up.
Into super cruise an unidentified signal source appears 4 light seconds away. “For that distance it would be a mistake not to go there, it doesn’t even cost me any fuel either.” The ship drops out of Supercruise. Ship AI: “21 contacts gained” Lillya: ahh good, I love it when they come up purple, means they are some sort of cargo.” “Wait, damn it, with that many containers it’s always Biowaste… stupid Biowaste giving me radiation. I shouldn’t even waste my time having a look, but Biowaste usually has a yellow-green glow surrounding it, these canisters don’t.”
Lillya: “Scanners are telling me… AI Artifacts!? Hmm, never heard of them, meh I’ll take them anyway.” Ship Ai: “Cargo scoop deployed”.
7 left to go. Ship AI: “2 contacts gained” Lillya: “Uh oh it’s a wanted python, and a viper escort.
I need to be precise, I only have a total of 14 railgun charges left, but I have rearranged the modules to fire at the same time, equating to 7 shot, against a Python I’ll be fine if I stay behind it, but that Viper is worrying me, it hasn’t even got its weapons deployed.”
The Python opens fire. Its weapons aren’t too powerful but I have to be quick in scooping the rest of the Artifacts. Only 3 left. Ship AI: “Shields offline” Lillya: “Damn it, oh well I’ll get them anyway, a little damage won’t hurt…I hope.”
Ship AI: “Hull at 61%.. 60%..” Lillya: “Ok that’s the last of them.” A high powered beam hits just to the left of the cockpit. Lillya: “Hull at 10%! Crap I knew that Viper would be a problem, it must have shot me with triple railguns! But it’s all good, hyperdrive has finished charging.” Ship AI: “4… 3… 2… 1… engage” Lillya: “Few… so close, no shields and 10% hull, I have no choice but to try and repair at a starport.” Bounty hunters are messaging through open communication. Bountyhunters: “I have an important message for you, drop out and follow me” Yeah right, sure, then they will immediately open fire, I’ll just purposely overshoot the safe dropout range and turn around. Hopefully that will shake any pursuers” Ship AI: “safe disengage ready” Lillya: “Facing the left side of Fairbain starport, why is it never so simple…” Ship AI: “5 contacts gained” I take a quick look at my scanners.
5! 5 Federal Enforcers. This is not good, but I have a little time, going wide about 15km out the front will be enough. Retracting I need to keep my ship heat down, its 40% standard, but that is not enough, cutting the power to my weapons, shields, cargo scanner, FSD interdictor and finally life support, 5 minutes of emergency air is all I have until I make it into the artificial atmosphere of the starport. Lillya: “Should be enough to cool it down to 10%” I start to spin my ship to lock into the same revolution speed as the port, as frost starts to form on the inside of the window, I boost forwards accelerating to 450m/s at which point I turn my thrusters off. Lillya: “Im already at 15% heat.” The space ports will only accept docking requests at 7.5km so I keep my sensors on. Lillya: 10km… 8km… 7km… Starport Ai: “Docking request denied” Lillya: wait what!? No no no, Starport AI: “Docking request denied” uh oh. 5km, 4km Starport Ai “docking request denied” Lillya: “Its too late I can’t turn around, being scanned by the feds now will set the starports heavy weapons on me, even with full shields and hull… not even Anacondas can get away.” I turn my thrusters on and slow down to 300m/s and try again Starport Ai: “docking request denied” At 2km. Ship Ai: “Ship scan detected” Lillya: “No no no no no.” Turning Thrusters on have put heat up to 25%, just enough for a good scanner to lock on. At 1km “docking request granted” Lillya: “YES! But ive still got that attempted scan, it takes a time to fully scan but if I get though the docks, their scanners cannot penetrate the thick walls, I’ll be safe. Just to make sure I’ll boost again to 450m/s.” Im in, I make it through, but still traveling overly fast inside a Starport, its big, but if I don’t slow down ill smash into the back of it and all this would be for nothing. Lillya: “The ships forward thruster aren’t powerful enough I can’t turn around quick enough so the only option is to boost again, but at the same time start to pitch up.” It works, the ships starts to slow down, but also, its heading towards an undocking hauler quite fast. Turning the ship in a roll 90 degrees just scrapes the side decreasing my hull to 3% Lillya: “I hope he doesn’t make me pay for that.” Out of danger I lower my landing gear and enter the docking bay Starport AI: “welcome to Aries Starport”
Immediately I select repair ship, it’s costly but the AI Artefacts should cover it. I stare amazed at the price these sell for, Lillya: “200,000cr each… and I have 21! Haha this is perfect. You know what, im gonna take a holiday, probably to The Witchhead nebula, I hear its purple skies are nice this time of year.”
The End
Im gonna put this as the cover, a screenshot i took just before i decided to go to the Witchhead nebula. im now almost in horsehead nebula (yes, the story based around my actual gameplay.)
Another thing is that the teacher said dont go over 950 words, so i had to leave A LOT out. even though im at over 1100 words lol. i modified some things to suit the story though, like the worth of credits, and the distance between stations in LHS 3447, i couldve wrote about it being a huge annoyance to do anything in there but... to keep word count down i didnt.
im posting this just to get you guys and girls opinions on if its good enough, im not too good at english as a subject itself, but story telling isnt too much of a problem.
Tell me anything you dont like, or think i should change, keeping in mind i am already past the max words. hehe ^_^
Start:
Waking up in asteroid belts of LHS 3477 isn’t too bad, the view is nice, i-it gets kinda cold when the sun goes behind the planet. But it’s safe, no one needs to go here, not even mining ships, the only company I have is the simple Ship AI, and the occasional slow moving asteroid hitting the side of my Cobra. Most people prefer starports, but that is not an option for me right now, it’s not the starport itself, but the bountyhunters who linger just outside, always scanning passing ships. If you manage to even get in the starport in the first place with a bounty, getting out and away is a completely different story, boosting straight from launch can be fatal, especially with a stripped down cobra like mine. With minimal amour, boost speed gets up to 450m/s, its either get it perfect the first time, or have to pay the insurance buyback plus any unpaid fines.
Its 13:43 Universal time, I should get going, only 1 hour left until my bounty runs out I shouldn’t have any problems, I mean, a 1,000,000cr bounty is quite a lot, but nothing to get excited about, just the weapons on my cobra cost more than that. Speaking of weapons im low on charges for both of my class 2 Railguns. Two class 1 gimbled beam lasers are good, but they are nothing without Railguns to back them up.
Into super cruise an unidentified signal source appears 4 light seconds away. “For that distance it would be a mistake not to go there, it doesn’t even cost me any fuel either.” The ship drops out of Supercruise. Ship AI: “21 contacts gained” Lillya: ahh good, I love it when they come up purple, means they are some sort of cargo.” “Wait, damn it, with that many containers it’s always Biowaste… stupid Biowaste giving me radiation. I shouldn’t even waste my time having a look, but Biowaste usually has a yellow-green glow surrounding it, these canisters don’t.”
Lillya: “Scanners are telling me… AI Artifacts!? Hmm, never heard of them, meh I’ll take them anyway.” Ship Ai: “Cargo scoop deployed”.
7 left to go. Ship AI: “2 contacts gained” Lillya: “Uh oh it’s a wanted python, and a viper escort.
I need to be precise, I only have a total of 14 railgun charges left, but I have rearranged the modules to fire at the same time, equating to 7 shot, against a Python I’ll be fine if I stay behind it, but that Viper is worrying me, it hasn’t even got its weapons deployed.”
The Python opens fire. Its weapons aren’t too powerful but I have to be quick in scooping the rest of the Artifacts. Only 3 left. Ship AI: “Shields offline” Lillya: “Damn it, oh well I’ll get them anyway, a little damage won’t hurt…I hope.”
Ship AI: “Hull at 61%.. 60%..” Lillya: “Ok that’s the last of them.” A high powered beam hits just to the left of the cockpit. Lillya: “Hull at 10%! Crap I knew that Viper would be a problem, it must have shot me with triple railguns! But it’s all good, hyperdrive has finished charging.” Ship AI: “4… 3… 2… 1… engage” Lillya: “Few… so close, no shields and 10% hull, I have no choice but to try and repair at a starport.” Bounty hunters are messaging through open communication. Bountyhunters: “I have an important message for you, drop out and follow me” Yeah right, sure, then they will immediately open fire, I’ll just purposely overshoot the safe dropout range and turn around. Hopefully that will shake any pursuers” Ship AI: “safe disengage ready” Lillya: “Facing the left side of Fairbain starport, why is it never so simple…” Ship AI: “5 contacts gained” I take a quick look at my scanners.
5! 5 Federal Enforcers. This is not good, but I have a little time, going wide about 15km out the front will be enough. Retracting I need to keep my ship heat down, its 40% standard, but that is not enough, cutting the power to my weapons, shields, cargo scanner, FSD interdictor and finally life support, 5 minutes of emergency air is all I have until I make it into the artificial atmosphere of the starport. Lillya: “Should be enough to cool it down to 10%” I start to spin my ship to lock into the same revolution speed as the port, as frost starts to form on the inside of the window, I boost forwards accelerating to 450m/s at which point I turn my thrusters off. Lillya: “Im already at 15% heat.” The space ports will only accept docking requests at 7.5km so I keep my sensors on. Lillya: 10km… 8km… 7km… Starport Ai: “Docking request denied” Lillya: wait what!? No no no, Starport AI: “Docking request denied” uh oh. 5km, 4km Starport Ai “docking request denied” Lillya: “Its too late I can’t turn around, being scanned by the feds now will set the starports heavy weapons on me, even with full shields and hull… not even Anacondas can get away.” I turn my thrusters on and slow down to 300m/s and try again Starport Ai: “docking request denied” At 2km. Ship Ai: “Ship scan detected” Lillya: “No no no no no.” Turning Thrusters on have put heat up to 25%, just enough for a good scanner to lock on. At 1km “docking request granted” Lillya: “YES! But ive still got that attempted scan, it takes a time to fully scan but if I get though the docks, their scanners cannot penetrate the thick walls, I’ll be safe. Just to make sure I’ll boost again to 450m/s.” Im in, I make it through, but still traveling overly fast inside a Starport, its big, but if I don’t slow down ill smash into the back of it and all this would be for nothing. Lillya: “The ships forward thruster aren’t powerful enough I can’t turn around quick enough so the only option is to boost again, but at the same time start to pitch up.” It works, the ships starts to slow down, but also, its heading towards an undocking hauler quite fast. Turning the ship in a roll 90 degrees just scrapes the side decreasing my hull to 3% Lillya: “I hope he doesn’t make me pay for that.” Out of danger I lower my landing gear and enter the docking bay Starport AI: “welcome to Aries Starport”
Immediately I select repair ship, it’s costly but the AI Artefacts should cover it. I stare amazed at the price these sell for, Lillya: “200,000cr each… and I have 21! Haha this is perfect. You know what, im gonna take a holiday, probably to The Witchhead nebula, I hear its purple skies are nice this time of year.”
The End
Im gonna put this as the cover, a screenshot i took just before i decided to go to the Witchhead nebula. im now almost in horsehead nebula (yes, the story based around my actual gameplay.)
Last edited:
