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Ian Phillips

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Ian Phillips
The usual suspects

A war had broken out. It felt as if a new body was lying, mocking him, around every corner.

The link had slowly become obvious to the over stretched police department. An underworld crime war was in full swing, with control of the drug trafficing trade the prize.

Except for a few standout anomalies. In amongst the onionhead overdoses and creative 'accidents' were a few simple but brutal executions with no drugs connections.

Jared Inxed, the detective in charge of the special investigation force, studied the board and sighed.

"Bring in the usual suspects, starting with that cripple, Mr Onion".
 
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MikeSnos

MikeSnos
One more needed....

This week's theme:
Cripple Mr Onion

Current Entries
*word count* (must be 100 words within the story!)
01 *100* - DocStone - Meet Mr Onion : https://forums.frontier.co.uk/showthread.php?t=5777&page=409&p=2027214&viewfull=1#post2027214
02 *100* - Phoenix_Dfire - (untitled) : https://forums.frontier.co.uk/showthread.php?t=5777&page=409&p=2029242&viewfull=1#post2029242
03 *100* - Goose4291 - The Ends Justify the Means : https://forums.frontier.co.uk/showthread.php?t=5777&page=409&p=2029445&viewfull=1#post2029445
04 *100* - Frank - It's Not Plagiarism. It's Homage. : https://forums.frontier.co.uk/showthread.php?t=5777&page=409&p=2029680&viewfull=1#post2029680
05 *100* - MikeSnos - The Senator's Loss (or gambling's for Imperial Mugs... MUG!) : https://forums.frontier.co.uk/showthread.php?t=5777&page=410&p=2030836&viewfull=1#post2030836
06 *100* - Simoof - THE FERVENT WINDS OF WAR - A GASTRONOMICALLY CATASTROPHICALLY ANOMALY : https://forums.frontier.co.uk/showthread.php?t=5777&page=410&p=2031652&viewfull=1#post2031652
07 *100* - Darkoba - A Stealthy Chess Move : https://forums.frontier.co.uk/showthread.php?t=5777&page=410&p=2032451&viewfull=1#post2032451
08 *100* - Splendour - King Takes Pawn : https://forums.frontier.co.uk/showthread.php?t=5777&page=410&p=2032832&viewfull=1#post2032832
09 *100* - Bikky - Walking Aids : https://forums.frontier.co.uk/showthread.php?t=5777&page=410&p=2032977&viewfull=1#post2032977
10 *100* - Erik Marcaigh - Deal With It : https://forums.frontier.co.uk/showthread.php?t=5777&page=410&p=2033001&viewfull=1#post2033001
11 *100* - MrMogadon - A Tale of Achenar Morpork : https://forums.frontier.co.uk/showthread.php?t=5777&page=410&p=2033625&viewfull=1#post2033625
12 *100* - Listeri69 - A Mouthfull Of Head...... : https://forums.frontier.co.uk/showthread.php?t=5777&page=410&p=2033776&viewfull=1#post2033776
13 *100* - Galactic Midden - No title, instad I'll just apologise in advance : https://forums.frontier.co.uk/showthread.php?t=5777&page=410&p=2034185&viewfull=1#post2034185
14 *100* - Clef_Hanger - Casabianca 3301 (apologies to Felicia Dorothea Hemans) : https://forums.frontier.co.uk/showthread.php?t=5777&page=411&p=2034979&viewfull=1#post2034979
15 *nn* - CdrTwisted - Steve Miller Banned : https://forums.frontier.co.uk/showthread.php?t=5777&p=2036715&viewfull=1#post2036715
16 *nn* - {SAS}Stalker - Crippled Mr Onion Sir : https://forums.frontier.co.uk/showthread.php?t=5777&p=2038011&viewfull=1#post2038011
17 *nn* - Riedquat - Cripple Mr Onion! : https://forums.frontier.co.uk/showthread.php?t=5777&p=2039139&viewfull=1#post2039139
18 *nn* - Steed - Seriously? : https://forums.frontier.co.uk/showthread.php?t=5777&p=2039407&viewfull=1#post2039407
19 *nn* - Ian Phillips - The usual suspects : https://forums.frontier.co.uk/showthread.php?t=5777&p=2042411&viewfull=1#post2042411
 
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Frank

Frank
Everyone feel free to fiddle to their heart's content. You must stop playing with your words when my post here says I'm erecting my poll.

I still have that one slot I need filled. Could you do the decent thing and fill it in for me?
 

sgurr

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Frank said:
Everyone feel free to fiddle to their heart's content. You must stop playing with your words when my post here says I'm erecting my poll.

I still have that one slot I need filled. Could you do the decent thing and fill it in for me?
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:) Can't fill two slots at the same time sadly, not that gifted.
 

Frank

Frank
I'd be happy to wait for you.
If there's anyone listening in, I'd also be happy for them to nip in and steal insanephoton's slot :)
 

Telakin

Telakin
How Galnet crippled Mr. Onion

Frank had saved the latest strain of high-yield onionhead from the federal snoop dogs. The seedlings sat snug in his underground miniature farm with an automatic caregiver drone he'd rigged to look after them.


The Lawnbot had needed some new features, but they were easy enough to implement, overriding the basic programming.


"Dad? I fixed the Galnet access in the cellar, the micronode was turned off."


"What? No!" He stomped down, unlocked the door and stood in front of a green patch where the onionhead seedlings had started to blossom. The automatic firmware refresh had reactivated the default fairway trim.
 

Erik Marcaigh

Erik Marcaigh
And that last entry closes the competition for this week's theme:
Cripple Mr Onion

Current Entries
*word count* (must be 100 words within the story!)
01 *100* - DocStone - Meet Mr Onion : https://forums.frontier.co.uk/showthread.php?t=5777&page=409&p=2027214&viewfull=1#post2027214
02 *100* - Phoenix_Dfire - (untitled) : https://forums.frontier.co.uk/showthread.php?t=5777&page=409&p=2029242&viewfull=1#post2029242
03 *100* - Goose4291 - The Ends Justify the Means : https://forums.frontier.co.uk/showthread.php?t=5777&page=409&p=2029445&viewfull=1#post2029445
04 *100* - Frank - It's Not Plagiarism. It's Homage. : https://forums.frontier.co.uk/showthread.php?t=5777&page=409&p=2029680&viewfull=1#post2029680
05 *100* - MikeSnos - The Senator's Loss (or gambling's for Imperial Mugs... MUG!) : https://forums.frontier.co.uk/showthread.php?t=5777&page=410&p=2030836&viewfull=1#post2030836
06 *100* - Simoof - THE FERVENT WINDS OF WAR - A GASTRONOMICALLY CATASTROPHICALLY ANOMALY : https://forums.frontier.co.uk/showthread.php?t=5777&page=410&p=2031652&viewfull=1#post2031652
07 *100* - Darkoba - A Stealthy Chess Move : https://forums.frontier.co.uk/showthread.php?t=5777&page=410&p=2032451&viewfull=1#post2032451
08 *100* - Splendour - King Takes Pawn : https://forums.frontier.co.uk/showthread.php?t=5777&page=410&p=2032832&viewfull=1#post2032832
09 *100* - Bikky - Walking Aids : https://forums.frontier.co.uk/showthread.php?t=5777&page=410&p=2032977&viewfull=1#post2032977
10 *100* - Erik Marcaigh - Deal With It : https://forums.frontier.co.uk/showthread.php?t=5777&page=410&p=2033001&viewfull=1#post2033001
11 *100* - MrMogadon - A Tale of Achenar Morpork : https://forums.frontier.co.uk/showthread.php?t=5777&page=410&p=2033625&viewfull=1#post2033625
12 *100* - Listeri69 - A Mouthfull Of Head...... : https://forums.frontier.co.uk/showthread.php?t=5777&page=410&p=2033776&viewfull=1#post2033776
13 *100* - Galactic Midden - No title, instad I'll just apologise in advance : https://forums.frontier.co.uk/showthread.php?t=5777&page=410&p=2034185&viewfull=1#post2034185
14 *100* - Clef_Hanger - Casabianca 3301 (apologies to Felicia Dorothea Hemans) : https://forums.frontier.co.uk/showthread.php?t=5777&page=411&p=2034979&viewfull=1#post2034979
15 *100* - CdrTwisted - Steve Miller Banned : https://forums.frontier.co.uk/showthread.php?t=5777&p=2036715&viewfull=1#post2036715
16 *100* - {SAS}Stalker - Crippled Mr Onion Sir : https://forums.frontier.co.uk/showthread.php?t=5777&p=2038011&viewfull=1#post2038011
17 *99* - Riedquat - Cripple Mr Onion! : https://forums.frontier.co.uk/showthread.php?t=5777&p=2039139&viewfull=1#post2039139
18 *100* - Steed - Seriously? : https://forums.frontier.co.uk/showthread.php?t=5777&p=2039407&viewfull=1#post2039407
19 *99* - Ian Phillips - The usual suspects : https://forums.frontier.co.uk/showthread.php?t=5777&p=2042411&viewfull=1#post2042411
20 *100* - Telakin - How GalNet Crippled Mr. Onion : https://forums.frontier.co.uk/showthread.php?t=5777&page=413&p=2044304&viewfull=1#post2044304

We have two entries with only 99 words after I checked them in www.wordcounter.net
Get 'em fixed before the competition starts! :)

Check back in a few hours when Mr. Frank gets his poll up. That's when the real festivities begin!
 
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Frank

Frank
Telakin said:
Sorry insane, I hope you don't mind! :)
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<hee hee hee> You know what you must do now insanephoton. You must finish the Drabble and post it on this thread, and we have to tell you how it would've won if you'd written it in time. It's the law!
 

CdrTwisted

CdrTwisted
Frank said:
<hee hee hee> You know what you must do now insanephoton. You must finish the Drabble and post it on this thread, and we have to tell you how it would've won if you'd written it in time. It's the law!
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There's always the possibility that, if you post it before the deadline and Ian Phillips or Riedquat haven't corrected their word count in time, then you'll take their place by disqualification :)

/DrabbleVsDrabble
 

insanephoton

insanephoton
Telakin said:
Sorry insane, I hope you don't mind! :)
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I don't mind at all.
Frank said:
<hee hee hee> You know what you must do now insanephoton. You must finish the Drabble and post it on this thread, and we have to tell you how it would've won if you'd written it in time. It's the law!
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Ooh that's cruel and there's me trying to cover 1500 ly in a couple of days. I guess I'm going to have be more picky about what I scan. I see if I can shape it up into something while waiting for scans to finish.
 

Frank

Frank
At least you're no longer fighting deadlines. I'll be sticking the poll up in an hour or so. It will be easy for me to clag it to the bottom of my post. Don't leave it too long though, or you won't hear your Drabble described by Psykokow's dulcet tones.
 

insanephoton

insanephoton
Moderator Squadron in action

"This is a the Federal Security Service. Cut you engines and submit to scanning"
The Imperial Clipper continued without response
"Damn I hope it isn't that visiting Imperial aristo. We don't want to cause a diplomatic incident."
"Yeah, that would be bad for our careers. The crew that delayed her and senator Waggler got busted down to the ranks"
"Ok the scan says the ship is the 'Mister Onion' registered to Commander Mike Snos"
"He's a well known rogue. Still not responding?"
"No, nothing"
"We shall have to cripple 'Mister Onion' then. Open fire"
The Moderators always got their man.
 

Simoof

Simoof
insanephoton said:
"This is a the Federal Security Service. Cut you engines and submit to scanning"
The Imperial Clipper continued without response
"Damn I hope it isn't that visiting Imperial aristo. We don't want to cause a diplomatic incident."
"Yeah, that would be bad for our careers. The crew that delayed her and senator Waggler got busted down to the ranks"
"Ok the scan says the ship is the 'Mister Onion' registered to Commander Mike Snos"
"He's a well known rogue. Still not responding?"
"No, nothing"
"We shall have to cripple 'Mister Onion' then. Open fire"
The Moderators always got their man.
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Never mind this weeks topic, that Drabble is one of the best I have ever read. Well done. I will definitely be voting for this one.
 

Frank

Frank
It is truly one of the greatest Drabbles I've ever read. It shouldn't have just been entered into this week's contest, it should have been up for the Nobel Prize for Literature... okay.. is that enough?

I'll go put up the poll now.
 

Erik Marcaigh

Erik Marcaigh
insanephoton said:
"This is a the Federal Security Service. Cut you engines and submit to scanning"
The Imperial Clipper continued without response
"Damn I hope it isn't that visiting Imperial aristo. We don't want to cause a diplomatic incident."
"Yeah, that would be bad for our careers. The crew that delayed her and senator Waggler got busted down to the ranks"
"Ok the scan says the ship is the 'Mister Onion' registered to Commander Mike Snos"
"He's a well known rogue. Still not responding?"
"No, nothing"
"We shall have to cripple 'Mister Onion' then. Open fire"
The Moderators always got their man.
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Bravo! Bravo! Encore! *throws roses at insanephoton's feet*
 
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