Michael Brookes
Game Director
Fiction Elite: Legacy
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Ok, will do. But I only marked errors in the later chapters, since I ignored those in the earlier ones - didn't think of writing them down at first. I should have a few more notes about earlier errors at home, I will check those when I get back.
Short disclaimer: my mother tongue isn't English, so I might have gotten some of these wrong. My apologies if that should be the case.
Also, since I read the Ebook, I can't give page numbers, and instead have to use the chapter, "Position" and percentage as they are displayed on my Kindle, in combination with some short description/quote of the respective text region.
- Chapter 28, pos. 3801, 65%: "His preferred the ambush predator method of hunting..." => "He preferred the ambush predator method of hunting..."
- Chapter 30, pos. 4015, 68%: "Yes, at least that what's I thought at first." => "Yes, at least that's what I thought at first."
- Chapter 31, pos. 4170, 71%: "So which us gets two to play with?" => "So which of us gets two to play with?"
- Chapter 31, pos. 4183, 71%: "Mervan followed her a moment later but kept part of his attention focused on the feeds from his cameras." => "Mervan followed him a moment later but kept part of his attention focused on the feeds from his cameras." (don't know about this one, but wasn't Lee the first to stand up? Then Mervan should be following "him", not "her", right?)
- Chapter 37, pos. 4959, 85%: "Julia didn't know how they were going defeat a fleet that outgunned them by such a huge margin." => "Julia didn't know how they were going to defeat a fleet that outgunned them by such a huge margin."
- Chapter 43, pos. 5686, 97%: "She didn't want to believe that Dee provided support for Laphrian attack but the more she discussed it with Mayborn, the more likely that appeared to be." => "She didn't want to believe that Dee provided support for the Laphrian attack but the more she discussed it with Mayborn, the more likely that appeared to be."
- Chapter 44, pos. 5727, 98%: "I understand that but this isn't a good place to for me to be at the moment." => "I understand that but this isn't a good place for me to be at the moment."
- Chapter 44, pos. 5815, 99%: "You stay where you." => "You stay where you are."
Michael Brookes
Game Director
Hm, I only found notes on two more errors, must have lost the others, sorry.
- Chapter 12, pos. 1605, 27%: "He'd put a lot of effort had gone into making sure that his ship's capability remained hidden from any aggressors." => "He'd put a lot of effort into making sure that his ship's capability remained hidden from any aggressors."
- Chapter 27, pos. 3644, 62%: "In front of her, the four defence force pilots formed a not-so-subtle barrier between Piotr and the left and Hammer on the right." => "In front of her, the four defence force pilots formed a not-so-subtle barrier between Piotr on the left and Hammer on the right."
Michael Brookes
Game Director
More typos from Elite: Legacy
I'm almost half way through the book, and I've been collecting typos too. I'm enjoying the story, but I am slightly disappointed that the official tie-in novel has so many howlers in it; as people might say round here, they really break immersion.
Still, at least they're easier to fix than software bugs... so here you go.
1%: And not forgetting of course my good friends and family who's support is invaluable => And not forgetting of course my good friends and family whose support is invaluable
1%: We really don't want to p--- of the head of security => We really don't want to p--- off the head of security
1%: The powerful engine that bent space and allowing them to travel => The powerful engine that bent space and allowed them to travel
1%: There's no sign of device being used => There's no sign of a device being used
3%: or at least take the alert two Sidewinders with him => or at least take the alert's two Sidewinders with him
12%: Julia had seen one those massive ships dock => Julia had seen one of those massive ships dock
16%: he wasn't planning on sneaking anywhere so that shouldn't problem => he wasn't planning on sneaking anywhere so that shouldn't be a problem
17%: Darik's pulled out of the turn => Darik pulled out of the turn
20%: in time to be able to analyse their jump trail and determine their location." => in time to be able to analyse their jump trail and determine their location.
20%: Helm, change course and take us to meeting point by the belt => Helm, change course and take us to the meeting point by the belt
22%: And I guess it doesn't matter know => And I guess it doesn't matter now
24%: helped prevent some of debilitating consequences of spaceflight => helped prevent some of the debilitating consequences of spaceflight
24%: that he'd let his prey slipped away => that he'd let his prey slip away
30%: Perhaps Julia was starting focus on what comes next => Perhaps Julia was starting to focus on what comes next
35%: Julia recalled that she'd been little brat at the time => Julia recalled that she'd been a little brat at the time
35%: An adventure, of course, isn't exciting with peril => An adventure, of course, isn't exciting without peril
36%: Even so, we need move forwards => Even so, we need to move forwards
37%: as long as they submitted to the their demands => as long as they submitted to their demands
38%: He's grown up in the old ship => He'd grown up in the old ship
40%: He highlighted and reviewed their files of few that he had => He highlighted and reviewed the files of the few that he had
42%: he took a lift from the docking bay up the administration level => he took a lift from the docking bay up to the administration level
48%: the Sidewinder wouldn't be able to put up of a fight either => the Sidewinder wouldn't be able to put up much of a fight either
These are on top of the ones that Arubeto posted; if I spot any more in the second half of the book, I'll stick them in another post. The % figures are from the Kindle version, if that helps.
Mark
I'm almost half way through the book, and I've been collecting typos too. I'm enjoying the story, but I am slightly disappointed that the official tie-in novel has so many howlers in it; as people might say round here, they really break immersion.
Still, at least they're easier to fix than software bugs... so here you go.
1%: And not forgetting of course my good friends and family who's support is invaluable => And not forgetting of course my good friends and family whose support is invaluable
1%: We really don't want to p--- of the head of security => We really don't want to p--- off the head of security
1%: The powerful engine that bent space and allowing them to travel => The powerful engine that bent space and allowed them to travel
1%: There's no sign of device being used => There's no sign of a device being used
3%: or at least take the alert two Sidewinders with him => or at least take the alert's two Sidewinders with him
12%: Julia had seen one those massive ships dock => Julia had seen one of those massive ships dock
16%: he wasn't planning on sneaking anywhere so that shouldn't problem => he wasn't planning on sneaking anywhere so that shouldn't be a problem
17%: Darik's pulled out of the turn => Darik pulled out of the turn
20%: in time to be able to analyse their jump trail and determine their location." => in time to be able to analyse their jump trail and determine their location.
20%: Helm, change course and take us to meeting point by the belt => Helm, change course and take us to the meeting point by the belt
22%: And I guess it doesn't matter know => And I guess it doesn't matter now
24%: helped prevent some of debilitating consequences of spaceflight => helped prevent some of the debilitating consequences of spaceflight
24%: that he'd let his prey slipped away => that he'd let his prey slip away
30%: Perhaps Julia was starting focus on what comes next => Perhaps Julia was starting to focus on what comes next
35%: Julia recalled that she'd been little brat at the time => Julia recalled that she'd been a little brat at the time
35%: An adventure, of course, isn't exciting with peril => An adventure, of course, isn't exciting without peril
36%: Even so, we need move forwards => Even so, we need to move forwards
37%: as long as they submitted to the their demands => as long as they submitted to their demands
38%: He's grown up in the old ship => He'd grown up in the old ship
40%: He highlighted and reviewed their files of few that he had => He highlighted and reviewed the files of the few that he had
42%: he took a lift from the docking bay up the administration level => he took a lift from the docking bay up to the administration level
48%: the Sidewinder wouldn't be able to put up of a fight either => the Sidewinder wouldn't be able to put up much of a fight either
These are on top of the ones that Arubeto posted; if I spot any more in the second half of the book, I'll stick them in another post. The % figures are from the Kindle version, if that helps.
Mark
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Michael Brookes
Game Director
Michael Brookes
Game Director
Will the downloadable version in the Frontier store be updated with the fixes? (just asking since I haven't yet started the book and it would naturally be great to have the fixed edition at hand when I do)
Thanks ! I'll keep reading it in English then ! I love it really ! Just finished chapter 15 !
Michael Brookes
Game Director
Even more typos from Elite: Legacy
Here are some more for you, this time from the last half of the book (I haven't quite finished it yet, but I'm close!). Again, these are on top of the ones that Arubeto has already reported.
52%: Especially on the young woman's as she had travelled => Especially on the young woman as she had travelled
52%: The one's who'd been identified were low-level => The ones who'd been identified were low-level
52%: assets formed the reminder of the opposition force => assets formed the remainder of the opposition force
52%: then use the Freeholm's own cleared channel => then use Freeholm's own cleared channel
60%: He's always honour these people in his thoughts => He'd always honour these people in his thoughts
62%: The trip back to the Freeholm took longer => The trip back to Freeholm took longer
67%: The rebellion wasn't of our making and the revelation of what happened at the penal colony for so many years. (This sentence seems to finish too early.)
67%: Our population was shocked when they discovered horror of life => Our population was shocked when they discovered the horror of life
73%: that was why she now heading to the office => that was why she was now heading to the office
74%: and she need the two hired guns to be focused => and she needed the two hired guns to be focused
78%: He had less than half of his missiles remaining => He had fewer than half of his missiles remaining
80%: blasting a whole which they shot through => blasting a hole which they shot through
80%: "Eagle One to all ships. Retreat to base." => "Eagle Two to all ships. Retreat to base." (This is Julia talking, not her dad.)
80%: they wouldn't have had a chance to returning home => they wouldn't have had a chance of returning home
83%: achieve our mission objectives with a little loss as possible => achieve our mission objectives with as little loss as possible
85%: and that mean having someone of importance => and that meant having someone of importance
87%: Cobra Mark III and a Hauler => Cobra Mk III and a Hauler
87%: the Navy had learned from their previous error and deploy the Cutters => the Navy had learned from their previous error and would deploy the Cutters
88%: for Lina and following Sidewinders => for Lina and the following Sidewinders
88%: The fighters streaked past his ship and some flipped on their axis => The fighters streaked past his ship and some flipped on their axes
89%: It looked like he he'd failed => It looked like he'd failed
90%: Caught up the same thrill => Caught up in the same thrill
Mark
Here are some more for you, this time from the last half of the book (I haven't quite finished it yet, but I'm close!). Again, these are on top of the ones that Arubeto has already reported.
52%: Especially on the young woman's as she had travelled => Especially on the young woman as she had travelled
52%: The one's who'd been identified were low-level => The ones who'd been identified were low-level
52%: assets formed the reminder of the opposition force => assets formed the remainder of the opposition force
52%: then use the Freeholm's own cleared channel => then use Freeholm's own cleared channel
60%: He's always honour these people in his thoughts => He'd always honour these people in his thoughts
62%: The trip back to the Freeholm took longer => The trip back to Freeholm took longer
67%: The rebellion wasn't of our making and the revelation of what happened at the penal colony for so many years. (This sentence seems to finish too early.)
67%: Our population was shocked when they discovered horror of life => Our population was shocked when they discovered the horror of life
73%: that was why she now heading to the office => that was why she was now heading to the office
74%: and she need the two hired guns to be focused => and she needed the two hired guns to be focused
78%: He had less than half of his missiles remaining => He had fewer than half of his missiles remaining
80%: blasting a whole which they shot through => blasting a hole which they shot through
80%: "Eagle One to all ships. Retreat to base." => "Eagle Two to all ships. Retreat to base." (This is Julia talking, not her dad.)
80%: they wouldn't have had a chance to returning home => they wouldn't have had a chance of returning home
83%: achieve our mission objectives with a little loss as possible => achieve our mission objectives with as little loss as possible
85%: and that mean having someone of importance => and that meant having someone of importance
87%: Cobra Mark III and a Hauler => Cobra Mk III and a Hauler
87%: the Navy had learned from their previous error and deploy the Cutters => the Navy had learned from their previous error and would deploy the Cutters
88%: for Lina and following Sidewinders => for Lina and the following Sidewinders
88%: The fighters streaked past his ship and some flipped on their axis => The fighters streaked past his ship and some flipped on their axes
89%: It looked like he he'd failed => It looked like he'd failed
90%: Caught up the same thrill => Caught up in the same thrill
Mark
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Michael Brookes
Game Director
I've finished! Enjoyable stuff.
Here are the other typos I spotted:
56%: The controls on the Cobra Mark III => The controls on the Cobra Mk III
56%: but one of the Cobra Mark IIIs seemed unlikely => but one of the Cobra Mk IIIs seemed unlikely
56%: the Cobra Mark III had been near the top of the list => the Cobra Mk III had been near the top of the list
93%: Cobra Mark III and a Viper => Cobra Mk III and a Viper
94%: Belin used all of this advantage that it could => Belin used all of this advantage that he could
96%: What could you say a family light years away? => What could you say to a family light years away?
98%: onto the tray holding Lee's body." => onto the tray holding Lee's body.
98%: Now one of you is going to tell what this is all about => Now one of you is going to tell me what this is all about
98%: Piotr made to stand and Julie knocked him back => Piotr made to stand and Julia knocked him back
99%: committed a crime of the station => committed a crime on the station
This includes the Julia/Julie typo that Fost mentioned.
Mark
Ah thanks for digging up the specifics!
Couple of things that have probably been discussed over and over and over:
Firstly, on the first page there is mention that Freeholm is celebrating two 10 year anniversaries, but only goes on to mention one, unless I am an idiot.
Secondly about Artemis in the book:
Now that I've finished it, just have to say I loved it. It was hard to get into at first, like any book that's introducing brand new characters and explaining the setting, but once I got past that, I was hooked. Couldn't put it down. The story was extremely gripping and well conceived, the characters were all fascinating, the interplay between them really kept me turning the pages to find out what would happen. Also, a sci-fi story that's completely original and lacking in cliché is an outstanding achievement. But I'm now sold on Michael's writing, he's a top author and I'll look out for his works in the future.
Michael, very impressed. Please keep up the good work!
I wish I could write my own, there's literally an entire galaxy of stories to be told, but I can't really afford £4,500 right now
Firstly, on the first page there is mention that Freeholm is celebrating two 10 year anniversaries, but only goes on to mention one, unless I am an idiot.
Secondly about Artemis in the book:
It's not the same as the real Artemis, just want to know why? Is it because players came along and changed the factions around just to annoy Michael (I mean, Freeholm being Empire and Laphria being Artemis Resistence almost mocks the story)? Or has he just used pure artistic licence? Or is it based in the future/past? Or will it be manually changed at some point?
Also, why is Freeholm an outpost in the game? Where is "The Belt"? Appears on the system map but not in the Navigation panel.
Also, why is Freeholm an outpost in the game? Where is "The Belt"? Appears on the system map but not in the Navigation panel.
Now that I've finished it, just have to say I loved it. It was hard to get into at first, like any book that's introducing brand new characters and explaining the setting, but once I got past that, I was hooked. Couldn't put it down. The story was extremely gripping and well conceived, the characters were all fascinating, the interplay between them really kept me turning the pages to find out what would happen. Also, a sci-fi story that's completely original and lacking in cliché is an outstanding achievement. But I'm now sold on Michael's writing, he's a top author and I'll look out for his works in the future.
Michael, very impressed. Please keep up the good work!
I wish I could write my own, there's literally an entire galaxy of stories to be told, but I can't really afford £4,500 right now
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